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Tang Dynasty

This article is about the Tang Dynasty of Medieval China. It has been improved drastically over the last couple of months, with the expansion of all sections, addition of new sections, addition of an infobox, and as of now 20 inline citations with proper references cited. However, reading through it, I realize there is much to be done with this article still. Some parts seem a bit sloppy in organization, and I'd like to get feedback on that. On the other hand, some parts are organized very well, flow very well, and are very informative while being, of course, relevant to the topic. Any general suggestions on how to improve this article?--PericlesofAthens 15:33, 5 July 2007 (UTC)

I have made some general improvements to the article, and it now has 36 different inline citations, the majority of them being from Needham and Ebrey, though (books I own).--PericlesofAthens 15:55, 12 July 2007 (UTC)

I just created a new article List of Tang Emperors as well, to leave some more room in this article for expansion.--PericlesofAthens 19:54, 12 July 2007 (UTC)

In expanding the article on the Tang capital of Chang'an, I've revamped the section here in this article on Chang'an. Go check it out!--PericlesofAthens 20:16, 16 July 2007 (UTC)

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(I've removed a couple of suggestions that were obviously not applicable, but there may be more — Use your own judgement.) Thanks, DrKiernan 09:13, 20 July 2007 (UTC)

Thanks!--PericlesofAthens 08:25, 21 July 2007 (UTC)