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Hell in a Cell

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I've listed this article for peer review because I wish to know if this article could become a Good Article and if there's anything I need to do to make it Good Article good.

Thanks, --Nascar king 22:26, 23 August 2010 (UTC)

I'll take a stab at this - be warned, the article is going to need some work.

• Layout
  • First off I advise moving the image over to the right actually, I just did this. Much better
  • The image needs a caption. See WP:CAPTION
  • I advise adding more section headers to break the article up.
• Language
  • Language such as Their next match was meant to be a normal steel cage match, but the WWF took it one step further is probably not greatly appropriate. Try and rewrite the content using more neutral language.
  • There is a lot of use of the word "generally" and similar in the article. Avoid the use of -ly words because they aren't the best grammar (and are a little vague for an authoritative article)
  • The article needs a good clean for language and grammar
• References
  • The article relies on a single reference. You need a lot more reliable sources for this to be a good article. Sources should support as much of the content as possible
  • The list of incidents, specifically, needs sourcing

Further Comments

One thing that isn't clear is what events are within the canonical storyline of the wrestling - and which are real life mishaps. The list of times the fighters leave the cage is, for example, ambiguous. For example was the injury described in In the first Cell match, the door was unlocked to allow the removal of an injured cameraman real? or part of the story?

I hope this helps you improve the article! --Errant Tmorton166^(Talk) 10:14, 24 August 2010 (UTC)