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Darren Matthews

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I've listed this article for peer review because i want to improve the article as much as possible so that for the time being it can be listed as a good article, with the ultimate target of FA standard. All comments made will be much appreciated.

Thanks, Eddie6705 (talk) 16:14, 25 December 2008 (UTC)

• Quick-comment - I would use Shawn Michaels, Shelton Benjamin, and CM Punk as examples of quality prose, mainly Michaels' because it is in an OOU format.--Truco 17:21, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

I mean, refer to those articles on how the prose should look like for this article if you want to nominate it for GA. WP:PROSE explains what a prose is, which literally refers to the wording. OOU means "Out-Of-Universe," which is the view from which this article should be written. So use the above articles as suggestions on how to reword and write a quality article.--Truco 21:47, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments by Nikki

• First, I'd take care of the cleanup tag at the top of the article by adding additional reliable sources. Books would be best.
• There especially needs to be some non-WWE sources.
• WP:JARGON: wrestling terms like "heel", "face", or "turn" need to be substituted for words a non-fan would understand like "hero" or "villain"
• More personal information would be essential to achieve a FA.
• There are too many headers.
• WP:LEAD: the lead is supposed to summarize the article, not list every championship he has held.
• I've added some fact tags where the information is a quote, stat, or possibly controversial.
  • Have added references to all fact tags. Eddie6705 (talk) 20:20, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
• There is a lot of week-by-week detail that needs to be removed, especially in the later years.

I crossed off a few that I fixed (at least to a degree) while I was copyediting just now. Nikki♥311 01:45, 4 January 2009 (UTC)