Talk:1928–29 Cardiff City F.C. season/GA1

GA Review[edit]

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:16, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Am going to review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 18:17, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"The 1928–29 season was the 28th season of competitive football played by Cardiff City F.C. and the team's eighth consecutive season in the First Division of the Football League." - repetition of "season"
Wikilink "the previous year" in the first sentence to 1927–28 Cardiff City F.C. season
Wikilink relegated to Promotion and relegation
"As of August 2020, the defeat remains the club's worst defeat in the competition." - repetition of "defeat"

Wikilink South Wales
"manager Fred Stewart had signed several players from non-league teams during the final months of the previous season, such as Matt Robinson, Tom Helsby, William Roberts and Francis Harris, who formed part of the first team for the 1928–29 season." - repetition of "team"
"including two members of the 1927 FA Cup Final winning team Sam Irving and Ernie Curtis." - think there is a word missing between "team" and "Sam"
Wikilink free transfer to Free transfer (association football)
The link of Ministry of Labour is better off redirected to Ministry of Labour (United Kingdom)

"and was preceded by an opening ceremony for the newly constructed rook above the Grange End Stand" - roof
"As of August 2020, the result remains Cardiff's largest win in the top tier while Ferguson's tally of five is the most scored by a Cardiff player in a league match," - repetition of "Cardiff"
"but was unable to stop the side falling to a 3–1 defeat to Sheffield United." - losing 3–1 to Sheffield United.
"Nelson's injury would ultimately end his season as he appeared only two more times later in the year while Ferguson would be plagued by injury, missing more than half of the remaining season." - repetition of "season"
"Albert Miles scored the only goal of the game to give Cardiff their first win in 11 games" - repetition of "game(s)"
"in a 2–1 victory in the reverse fixture against Leeds and a 2–0 victory over Newcastle on 29 December." - repetition of "victory"

"Cardiff suffered defeats to Bolton and Burnley in the first week of 1929," - Cardiff were defeated by
Add a link to player-manager
Wikilink Scottish First Division
"with 20th ace Burnley" - place
Wikilink relegation to Promotion and relegation

"and were considered the overwhelming favourites for the match." - considered by whom?
"a defeat which Christian Saunders describes as "one of the biggest shocks the ... tournament ever produced"." - perhaps clarify Saunders said this in his 2013 book?

"Stewart used a significantly higher number of players due to injury and form, with 30 players making at least one appearance during the campaign." - repetition of "players"
"Keenor and Thirlaway were the only other players to make more than 40 appearances, while four players," - same issue as above

Wikilink Second Division on the first mention to the relevant article
"In a club programme at the end of the season, Keenor bemoaned the club's injury problems" - repetition of "club"

For the publisher of Reference 9 "The Cardiff City Miscellany" called Pitch books, the word "book" is missing

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 19:28, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Thanks for another review. Amended everything listed here, let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 08:55, 31 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 10:29, 31 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]